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Am I losing my mind,
Am I going insane,
Is this really life,
Or is it just a game,
If after game over,
we can restart,
Would we change our own ending,
So we won't have to part,
Would we learn from the past,
and just carry on,
Or keep getting game over,
Until we are gone,
Could we save every princess,
Could we fight till the end,
Would we fight with sweet strangers,
Who we'll slowly befriend,
But once the princess is saved,
And the adventure is gone,
When there is nothing left,
To let you move on,
Is that the same as game over,
Except you completed your task,
Is this not life,
Hid behind gamer's mask,
When living our lives,
Do we want to die young,
Before we completed the ending,
That we had begun,
Or will we save our life princess,
And defeat our own wrong,
And know that the end,
Was the end all along.
I really like this one :)
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TheGothicSongbird Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
I adore the way you put such a complicated thing into such easy-to-understand words
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LilacTrinity Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012
Thank you, I do try to make it easier for people to understand. Because, most of the time that is people's biggest problem. Not that they don't respect or see whats going on, but that they really just have trouble understanding. At least that's what I find.
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TheGothicSongbird Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
You're very welcome. You do an excellent job. :iconblackheartplz:
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poetryfreak15 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
I like this. Although I've come into habit that when I come to a comma in a poem I pause, so (not sure if you meant it to be read that way or not) but every line ended with a pause for me. And I had to keep adjusting the way I read the lines because the flow was a bit off here and there.
But it was a great poem! :) I love the message.
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LilacTrinity Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
yeah that's the way I meant it, a lot of my poems turn out like this. The way I read it flows differently in my head so I never really notice. I try to get to match up but sometimes I just can't put my finger on where things would be. Thank you though :D
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poetryfreak15 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
Ahh, I see. Yeah, I know what you mean, it's the same for me.
And you are most welcome!
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ferlio Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Student Digital Artist
beautiful :)
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LilacTrinity Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
Thank you :)
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TMNT224 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely Poem!!
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LilacTrinity Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012
Thank you
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